Solitude of the Seven Seas

[Libitinarius]

Solitude of the Seven Seas

Chapter 1 ~ Iota’s Sorrow

San Francisco, California, the year is 1994.

“I love you Iota”. Her soft voice carried through the living room, as she collected her keys and purse. Iota half paying attention sitting on the couch, watching the news on the television that Kurt Cobain committed suicide. He mumbled to himself, “Can you believe these celebrities nowadays Suzanne? Millionaires, they have it all, yet, so eager to throw their lives away.”

He turned to look and noticed an irritated look on Suzanne’s face from being ignored.

“Huh? Oh, you be careful Suzanne. Call me when you’re off work.”

“You worry too much Iota”. She sarcastically chuckled, irritably walking out the door of their apartment. That would be the last time Iota ever saw Suzanne alive.

The blistering night wind seemed to add to the drop in his body temperature as the tears rolled down his face. Iota could feel the damp squish of the grass beneath his body, the moisture from the grass seeping into his clothes; he began to speak aloud to the night sky in front of her tombstone.

“Dammit! I didn’t even get to tell her I loved her. Why god?! Why was I so fucking nonchalant!?” He balled his fists in anger, clenching the grass and mud into his palms. Iota could feel the anger beating violently through his chest cavity, the strain on the carotid arteries in his neck. Iota reached to touch her tombstone, softly stroking the engraving of her name.

“Cursing the God’s won’t bring her back Iota.” Said an eerie voice hidden somewhere in the cemetery.

“What the fuck do you know about it? Leave me alone, whoever you are! I’m warning you!” Iota’s blood pressure raced even higher, his head felt like it was going to explode at any second. He seemed to ignore the fact this dark figure knew his name.

“Well for one, ‘I know’ the God’s from above aren’t to blame for this, but the demons below.” The eerie voice revealed its true form. An old baldheaded man wearing a white scarf and kaki jacket stepped out of the shadow. The man seemed to have more hair growing out of his ears then on his head. Iota ignored his features as the man began to approach him.

Edited October 7, 2012 by Emotional Outlet

[Libitinarius]

Chapter 2: The Crazy old Man

“Suzanne is alive. Though her body is dead in this realm, her soul resurrects in another.” The old man eye twitches as he continues. “You couldn’t possibly understand the forces at work here, this was no coincidence. Suzanne vanishes, and what did the police discover? A corpse with dark circles enflamed around her eyes?”

This time Iota couldn’t help but wonder how this old man knew so much information regarding Suzanne’s disappearance 10 months ago. Her body found dragged into a forest area 100 miles away from where she was suppose to be that day. The coroner could never determine the cause of death.

“Who are you?” Iota attempts to collect his thoughts wiping the tears and snot from his face.

“I am a spirit walker. My name is Artos, I will help guide you along the journey ahead.”

“You expect me to believe this bullshit old man? You’re probably some bum off the street who dug through my trashcan and stole my identity.”

“Hahaha. Funny boy, but this is no joke. Listen, and listen carefully. Suzanne is in another plain, you must die by your own hand if you wish to see Suzanne again. There are other worlds such as this one, but only a select few can walk between them. I am not the only one who has such powers; there is another, an evil entity who wishes to stop you from what you must accomplish.”

“And what might that be, you raving lunatic? Are you off your medication, did you escape from the mental ward?”

“You must find Suzanne, only your love can save this dying universe. You must travel from plain to plain until you find her. You will soon discover there is much more to your ancestors then what you realize.”

[DuLake]

Not bad, seems a bit rushed, but not bad. Just try and slow it down and introduce us to the character a bit more. I'm sure Iota's a great guy, but I just don't know much about him (besides that he's sad). Seems like you have a really interesting story lined up for us, and I'm interested to see where it goes, but Iota feels kind of flat right now. I do like the premise though, it sounds like it's going to be pretty big.

[Libitinarius]

Yeah, you're right. Had this idea in my head all week. I wanted to go through more of the details of Suzanne and Iota. I had the idea of unravelling their stories as I go along, but it's also hard to care about them when you haven't given the audience any form of attachment. Thanks, I definitely respect your opinion!

[Kinara Uzumaki]

I think the story idea is good and I hope you keep working on it some more. It's not easy to write a story so don't worry if it has a few faults here and there.

[Rezin King]

very good so far