who am i?

[Guest Morpheus]

something i tried to come up with in the spur of the moment. it is in free verse b/c i usually don't write well in a set meter and rhyme scheme...sounds forced.

the giver that takes,

with ruthless abandon

and violent wrath.

an impartial judge

who reigns supreme

and rules absolutely.

in its wake

lay physical devastation,

demoralizing truth,

and ultimate purification.

a simultaneous union of

creation and destruction.

this power i am is neither

flesh and blood

nor divine from above.

the answer sought,

comes in all forms of life:

the beginning, the end,

and for all of eternity.

you know my name.

it melts in your mouth,

and quenches your thirst.

i violently rise and calmly fall,

sustaining the bodies of man

and maintaining the balance of earth.

who am i you ask?

i am...

water

Edited October 7, 2012 by Emotional Outlet

[RedXIII]

Your omega weapon from ff7 dirge of cerberus lol haha jokin nice poem

[-PHXN- New001]

Hmmm interesting.

The ending is quite my favorite, too cliche (insert accent mark wherever) IMO

I would work on the vocabulary though. Not that it wasn't a broad one, but having too may adjatives almost deminishes the poem?

Anyway, the point is you have talent, Sit down and you could write a quality poem