Red Cheeks

[AxelVIII]

"A tear falls for lost loved ones,

 

A tear is shed for lost friends,

 

A tear for those who held his Heart, and walked away.

 

He cries tears, but only tears of crimson, for all he feels now is blood."

 

 

One of my worst. I welcome advice, polite advice please.

Edited March 2, 2014 by AxelVIII

[DeathTheKid]

First time saying anything about a poem but how is it he feels blood? Why not pain? Is blood supposed to be pain? Either way I liked it and can relate.

Edited January 22, 2014 by DeathTheKid

[AxelVIII]

I meant blood as a metaphor for wounds, cuts, etc. Thanks for reading

[Astral_Goddess]

The title mislead me to think, this might be something different, perhaps romantic. But that's because of my mind set, I'm sure others would immediately get the general idea of the writing from the title unlike I did.

I think that even though it's short, it conveys how much more painful emotional wounds can be than physical wounds, and how it can break someone down faster than anything that anyone could physically throw at them. It may be one of your worst, but it's still a good writing.

[AxelVIII]

I love your interpretation Astral, thank you =)